Also, there needed to be a lot more emotional reactions I think. You gotta include the other girls now!anonymous readerReport 2012-06-11 20:24:22My god sooooo good I love the anime so this was sexy«12» Still, like I said this is nice.anonymous readerReport 2013-04-22 08:31:34best fucking storie i just started readiing it and i had to fap and cumed very fastanonymous readerReport 2012-11-19 11:11:28this is amazing you could work on actual manga . 6 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2014-09-06 21:40:09Loved it! Also, there needed to be a lot more emotional reactions I think. You missed that too. But imho you missed on inner’s character, she’s never been a cold hearted bitch that would not care if he died, she sometimes PRETENDS she doesn’t care and yet just look at how panicked she gets when he eats her pie and thinks he’s going to die. You described the mechanics of what happened, but how they felt, including how inner felt? But imho you missed on inner’s character, she’s never been a cold hearted bitch that would not care if he died, she sometimes PRETENDS she doesn’t care and yet just look at how panicked she gets when
