You have a certain ability but you try to be clever. Break those paragraphs up so the eyes can rest. Break those paragraphs up so the eyes can rest. You have a certain ability but you try to be clever. Break those paragraphs up so the eyes can rest. and third, learn to write. 3 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2008-10-26 17:58:03Stick with one POV. 3 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2008-10-26 17:58:03Stick with one POV. You have a certain ability but you try to be clever. 3 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2008-10-26 17:58:03Stick with one POV. and third, learn to write. Three of them confuses the story and makes it hard to follow. You have a certain ability but you try to be clever. You have a certain ability but you try to be clever. and third, learn to write. and third, learn to write. Break those paragraphs up so the eyes can rest. Three of them confuses the story and makes it hard to follow. Three of them confuses the story and makes it hard to follow. 3 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2008-10-26 17:58:03Stick with one POV. Break those paragraphs up so the eyes can rest.
