I admit I didn’t make it even a third of the way through this story. Way too choppy and hard to read. I’m not saying give up, but you really need a lot of work if your going to produce quality literature.anonymous readerReport 2012-12-02 20:05:20Mistakes yes ! More please !«1234» I admit I didn’t make it even a third of the way through this story. More please !«1234» Your writing shows some talent, so don’t give up.anonymous readerReport 2012-12-02 20:52:17I’m wondering if English is your first language, if it is you really need to proofread your work. You have numerous spelling and grammatical errors which should be obvious to you when you proof read your work. I’m not saying give up, but you really need a lot of work if your going to produce quality literature.anonymous readerReport 2012-12-02 20:05:20Mistakes yes ! Not perfect but a very good read ! Other than that, good job. Also can someone point out the spelling and grammatical errors (other than the weirds A’s) in my stories because i just put this through a spell check on Microsoft word and there were no mistakes???anonymous readerReport 2012-12-03 00:27:51Good
