The basic premise is a bit off for a supposed “true story” as well. Porn It’s not quite wall of text, you did break it up after the first long paragraph. A member of your family?!? Sorry, but, as a virgin, you just seem to know too much!anonymous readerReport 2012-11-11 08:56:41You switch between third person and first person seemingly at random. While I admit it’s possible, it’s not very probably. But there’s still plenty of room for improvement.«1» Sorry, but, as a virgin, you just seem to know too much!anonymous readerReport 2012-11-11 08:56:41You switch between third person and first person seemingly at random. 2 comments«1»Ovid58Report 2012-11-12 06:07:23I didn’t vote, since I don’t want to spoil your ranking – anyway, please be more careful – just as the anonymous reader has already said, you switch between third person and first person in a way that really makes things hard to follow… But there’s still plenty of room for improvement.«1» It’s not quite wall of text, you did break it up after the first long paragraph. The basic premise is a bit off for a supposed “true story” as well.
