Actually the short chapters work great for me because I read
during lunch breaks on iphone. 5 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2014-12-23 18:27:55I’m having to agree with the majority… So lets see if he gets to fuck all the girl on a big sleepoveranonymous readerReport 2013-04-09 18:34:57You move from past to present tense.djb8247Report 2013-04-09 17:21:11too much chatter and not enough action,taking too long to get father and daughter together,and repetious scenes,reasonable effort, score 4 out if 10anonymous readerReport 2013-04-09 15:05:08TOO SHORT OF A STORY: YOU TITILLATED ME, FINE BUT WHERE’S THE CLIMAX? 5 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2014-12-23 18:27:55I’m having to agree with the majority… ’nuff buildup, let’s get some of Dad’s cock in that girl…anonymous readerReport 2013-06-01 19:12:55Oh well, I give A for effort to keep it going. So lets see if he gets to fuck all the girl on a big sleepoveranonymous readerReport 2013-04-09 18:34:57You move from past to present tense.djb8247Report 2013-04-09 17:21:11too much chatter and not enough action,taking too long to get father and daughter together,and repetious scenes,reasonable effort, score 4 out if 10anonymous readerReport 2013-04-09 15:05:08TOO SHORT OF A STORY: YOU TITILLATED ME, FINE BUT WHERE’S THE CLIMAX?
